Sawyer Ohman

CMM110-A

9/29/23

Journal #8

The speech that I gave was well done, but it was very long. Part of the problem was I hadn’t rehearsed my speech enough. I ended up repeating points that I had already made. My peers’ feedback helped me to understand that I need to organize my thoughts in a more straightforward way. As well as repeating myself I also used a lot of filler words such as “like” and “umm”. This slows my speech down quite a bit and makes me sound less professional. I also struggled with looking at my computer screen. There were certainly several points when I stopped speaking to look at my computer, this is not only unprofessional but when I take these pauses I begin to lose the attention of the audience. I made a good effort to connect with the audience using words such as “us” and “ourselves”, this can help the audience relate to my personal opinions. I need to do most of my improvement with the delivery of my speech and the organization of my points. I need to be more concise and simplify my body paragraphs, hopefully this will help me eliminate some of the repetition. My introduction and conclusion were my strong points, they brought my audience in and kept them interested to end the speech. I really liked how I mentioned my role models this was unique to my speech and I find role models are very influential to our personal selves.